REVISIONS REQUESTED Thank you for your interest in a Gentle Night. After reading your application, the mod team feels some revisions are needed.
► Power section: Because we ask characters to consider their powers in the context of the Jewel, we do not accept external links to powers. We prefer them to be summarized and easily understandable for people who are canon blind. Velvet’s marital artes don’t need to be listed as long as they are physical attacks with no magical or magic-like effects. For reference, resurrection abilities and abilities that restore a magic/mana/etc pool will not work as those game world specific mechanics don’t exist outside the game world.
“Her stone will give her a boost in her strength and give her arts that extra buff.” Velvet has an Opal Jewel. As stated in the FAQ and on the Blood page, an Opal Jewel is canon equivalent, meaning it will give her nothing extra. You are welcome to include a paragraph about how a darker Jewel received after her Offering could impact these powers.
► Personality section: Needs an editing pass. Parts of the personality section are difficult to understand due to run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and/or missing/misplaced words.
► Player section: The name in this section needs to be player name/alias, not your character and we think your plurk name might be misspelled.
You have three days to complete and submit your revisions by responding to this comment.
REVISIONS
Thank you for your interest in a Gentle Night. After reading your application, the mod team feels some revisions are needed.
► Power section: Because we ask characters to consider their powers in the context of the Jewel, we do not accept external links to powers. We prefer them to be summarized and easily understandable for people who are canon blind. Velvet’s marital artes don’t need to be listed as long as they are physical attacks with no magical or magic-like effects. For reference, resurrection abilities and abilities that restore a magic/mana/etc pool will not work as those game world specific mechanics don’t exist outside the game world.
“Her stone will give her a boost in her strength and give her arts that extra buff.” Velvet has an Opal Jewel. As stated in the FAQ and on the Blood page, an Opal Jewel is canon equivalent, meaning it will give her nothing extra. You are welcome to include a paragraph about how a darker Jewel received after her Offering could impact these powers.
► Personality section: Needs an editing pass. Parts of the personality section are difficult to understand due to run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and/or missing/misplaced words.
► Player section: The name in this section needs to be player name/alias, not your character and we think your plurk name might be misspelled.
You have three days to complete and submit your revisions by responding to this comment.